Landing Page review please

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The sentence that reads "If you are like me you think about this every time you drive around " is supposed to end with a geo script of the city - for some reason it's not working in Word Press. Anyone know how to fix that?
 
too much text in the beginning. i was turned off. im sure a lot of ppl would open your lp, see all the writing, and just close it.

maybe add some more pics at the top and make the text bigger. it's too condensed and the font is too small so it feels like you're reading an essay.
 
That's an expensive car seat. When you start PPC make sure you're not just advertising to moms but moms that can afford it.

An affili link needs to be higher up also to improve CT to offer. Maybe right under "Car Seat Installation: Protect your child by installing the seat correctly." Bullet points above all the <p> text might reduce bounce rate as well - kind of lead people into all that reading.
 
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that shit neeeeedss to go

make it more colorful, add more pictures, cloak those links

thats all i can muster up for now
 
The price shouldnt be an issue. You should have some images/video and really kick in that sense of fear and urgency.
 
nat3r said:
that shit neeeeedss to go

make it more colorful, add more pictures, cloak those links

thats all i can muster up for now
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It's gone - but what's weird is I have NO idea how it got in there. I'm checking plugins, etc, but when I made the original post it was NOT there.

It was definitly in the body of the post though. I checked.

**EDIT: Pingcrawl was enabled.

Working on the rest of your suggestions...
 
im not a copy writing guy, im still practicing, so i cant help you with that

glad all that garbage is gone at the bottom

you also need to take a look at all your font sizes, its all the same, vary it up, again i would choose a different theme,the current one you have in bland and mundane, the subject may be dismal

think of it this way, you meet a girl and shes dressed like shit and she doesnt look that good. she could be the greatest person on the planet, but your not going to give your time to a gal that looks like shit

dress your site up so people will want to have sex with it :)

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and the link in that image is broken
 
Okay - font sizes fixed.

Broken links fixed and cloaked - learned how to do double meta refresh which is pretty easy.

Scary accident imagery added. Fire away.

Dressed it up a bit.....I
 
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